Outcome 1(Recursive Process)– Demonstrate the ability to approach writing as a recursive process that requires substantial revision of drafts for content, organization, and clarity(global revision) as well as editing and proofreading (local revision). 

Never before have I learned how to truly revise and had opportunities in class to prioritize the revision process of my writing. Throughout this semester I have learned the process of analyzing the “They Say” in connection and relation to bringing it all together with what “I say”. In high school, I was taught simply to never use “I”, thus focused more on summary and relating sources back to the prompt. I had the “They Say” down to a tee, but had no opportunity to incorporate the “I Say”, until now! I have had free range to incorporate personal connections and details however I felt best fit to validate my claims. 

Furthermore, I had less sentence level structure formats I had to follow. For example, previously I was taught my thesis could only be one sentence and had to bring in my main claims for my body paragraphs. That was not the case in this class. I had the ability to split up my thesis, focussing on elaborating on my beliefs and not feeling I had to cram my ideas. 

In my work samples I will show an example of how I learned to elaborate on a personal connection(global revision) as well as an example of how I learned to split up my claim(local revision).

Work Sample 1- Rough draft of a personal connection from Essay #1 in claim 2 paragraph

Final version of same personal connection from Essay #1 in claim 2 paragraph(Work Sample 1-Global Revision)

Work Sample 2- Rough draft of thesis from Essay #1 at end of intro paragraph

Final draft of thesis from Essay #1 at end of intro paragraph(Work Sample 2- Local Revision)

In my first work sample example, there is a clear difference in specificity. My rough draft personal connection explains my main ideas of the value of in person connections and relationships. However, it does not illustrate the moment I am describing. I am able to bring the reader in to really feel what I felt by adding more personal detail. I am globally revising by further developing my claim.

In my second work sample, my muscle memory of cramming my claims and overall message into one sentence is seen. It is filled with detail, but lacks flow and is difficult for the reader to truly comprehend what I intended to get across. My final thesis elaborates on the same points, but is updated on the sentence(local) level to allow the reader to feel less overwhelmed/fatigued by reading it.